tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7004461851315310562.post5816941943325572677..comments2023-08-28T15:15:35.995-04:00Comments on Murphblog: Can We Talk Wizard of Oz?Paul Michael Murphyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17318098111985714443noreply@blogger.comBlogger18125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7004461851315310562.post-48315812692776544472010-02-26T00:12:32.247-05:002010-02-26T00:12:32.247-05:00LMAO Tracy!LMAO Tracy!Rena Joneshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02328844122193024220noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7004461851315310562.post-60426543929406322010-02-24T12:19:28.931-05:002010-02-24T12:19:28.931-05:00I don't think Dorothy's home life was that...I don't think Dorothy's home life was that bad. Even in the shiny new world of Oz, which was wonderful at first, she ended up missing her family - even if it wasn't perfect. <br /><br />I think it depends on if in the real world your character's take on it was "this sucks" or if she was just looking at all the negative. <br /><br />By being in Oz, Dorothy experienced character growth and came to the realization that even though home wasn't perfect, it was her home. that's why it worked. But she also didn't fall in love in Oz - that might have changed the whole story.Laura Paulinghttp://www.laurapauling.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7004461851315310562.post-11100118772704526732010-02-24T09:32:46.205-05:002010-02-24T09:32:46.205-05:00JONATHON: :)
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I wishi you all a great da...JONATHON: :)<br /><br />wv: wishi<br />I wishi you all a great day.Anitahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06333494452915600562noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7004461851315310562.post-89386122279674360412010-02-23T22:27:56.655-05:002010-02-23T22:27:56.655-05:00Jigga what Anita?Jigga what Anita?Jonathon Arntsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17366218140886892757noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7004461851315310562.post-64226929440341034452010-02-23T15:01:50.655-05:002010-02-23T15:01:50.655-05:00I will pass your comments to OD, everyone. She rea...I will pass your comments to OD, everyone. She reads as much as me and has a realistic perspective of what would sell to girls her age, so if anyone wants to run things by her, let me know. She does not like saccharin (fake sweet) or adult writers attempting to write the jargon of teens.Anitahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06333494452915600562noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7004461851315310562.post-19819011712052440452010-02-23T14:23:28.989-05:002010-02-23T14:23:28.989-05:00Maybe this is essentially what the brilliant OD sa...Maybe this is essentially what the brilliant OD said. You said it yourself all kids think the grass is greener on the other side, but does the other side end up being so great? There's conflict in having your expectations not met. Also, there's that coming of age thing where the girl realizes that the things that are hardest, the stupid things that our parents want us to do, may actually be best for us. Or we learn how to tell them to shove it. Depending if we write MG or YA.Tina Laurel Leehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04482757085942311091noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7004461851315310562.post-91683521664156126212010-02-23T13:43:23.815-05:002010-02-23T13:43:23.815-05:00Somehow my comment fell under "Diane" my...Somehow my comment fell under "Diane" my wife's google account. Strange. And don't start calling me Diane, I already have a girl's name.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05514067724256745623noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7004461851315310562.post-6906874967386488272010-02-23T12:03:08.437-05:002010-02-23T12:03:08.437-05:00Oz was not a "homey" place. Even without...Oz was not a "homey" place. Even without the wicked witch, it was weird and creepy (I mean, all of that horrid color). We're never given the impression it's a good place to LIVE. So even Dorothy's icky life in Kansas seems preferable. At least she has a home and bedroom and people who look and act like her.<br /><br />I'm with Tracy; I think you've got to address this, especially if your MC finds a boy in this other world that she likes (Dorothy didn't find anyone her age to befriend--that might have made a difference in her wanting to stay, too.)MG Higginshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03584010470283038023noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7004461851315310562.post-19051265159515159232010-02-23T11:17:52.707-05:002010-02-23T11:17:52.707-05:00A movie that comes to mind after reading your post...A movie that comes to mind after reading your post is "City Slickers" when the MC discovers (through Curly) that he has to find his "one thing" that makes him happy. For each person, that one thing is different.<br /><br />Great post and good luck with your story, Paul.Rena Joneshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02328844122193024220noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7004461851315310562.post-23103947661144994502010-02-23T01:02:34.500-05:002010-02-23T01:02:34.500-05:00PMM - I can't read that.
Anita - think OD is...PMM - I can't read that. <br /><br />Anita - think OD is taking queries???Dianehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09057629538302724759noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7004461851315310562.post-13732272112889950152010-02-22T23:43:08.804-05:002010-02-22T23:43:08.804-05:00Anita, please pass along my gratitude to OD. I was...Anita, please pass along my gratitude to OD. I was thinking along those same lines regarding the potential plot problem.<br /><br />Also tell her that I will attempt to suppress my propensity for sesquipedalian excess by expunging my manuscript of all magniloquent verbosity in an attempt to achieve verisimilitude.<br /><br />(That took me ten minutes to write.)Paul Michael Murphyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17318098111985714443noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7004461851315310562.post-14744126408471352732010-02-22T23:30:09.446-05:002010-02-22T23:30:09.446-05:001. Even though the parents are overprotective, doe...1. Even though the parents are overprotective, does she still like them? (asks the overprotective mother...), if so, no problem. Also, most kids deep down love their parents whether they admit it or not. <br />2. I've watched that part many times, Jonathan!<br />3. Anita, OD needs to set up a critique service. She can use the $ for bubble gum and books.<br />4. My 7 yo daughter is in the Land of Oz play this year. She wanted to be a flying monkey, but she's a munchkin/poppy.Kelly Polarkhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10968381456100611120noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7004461851315310562.post-19949868103710612272010-02-22T21:32:09.484-05:002010-02-22T21:32:09.484-05:00OK. OD, to your ? about whether it's a plot pr...OK. OD, to your ? about whether it's a plot problem:<br />No!! This is like a moral-of-the-story thing. The girl learns that there are people who love her back home and that she doesn't belong in this world.<br /><br />Also, OD does not want the love interest to use overly big words...apparently this is happening a lot in teen books now and OD says it is "Not attractive."<br /><br />Finally, she says:<br />This appeals to me as an eighth grade girl!!Anitahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06333494452915600562noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7004461851315310562.post-7562585149086578262010-02-22T20:50:13.130-05:002010-02-22T20:50:13.130-05:00Does anyone else watch, rewind, watch, rewind, wat...Does anyone else watch, rewind, watch, rewind, watch, rewind the hanging?<br /><br />Blame it on my History teacher.<br /><br />I seriously apologize for always detracting from your blog.Jonathon Arntsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17366218140886892757noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7004461851315310562.post-79308600426732232632010-02-22T20:30:10.437-05:002010-02-22T20:30:10.437-05:00Dorothy obviously was brainwashed by someone. &qu...Dorothy obviously was brainwashed by someone. "There's no place like home. There's no place like home..."Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7004461851315310562.post-14607527703317264822010-02-22T18:53:50.866-05:002010-02-22T18:53:50.866-05:00I'll run this by Oldest Daughter and get back ...I'll run this by Oldest Daughter and get back to you. Also, guess what I'm reading to the kiddos right now.Anitahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06333494452915600562noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7004461851315310562.post-64224299708078078722010-02-22T18:16:35.593-05:002010-02-22T18:16:35.593-05:00Yes, I think you do have a problem. If it's no...Yes, I think you do have a problem. If it's not feeling right to you, then change it. So why does Dorothy want to go home? Is that question answered in the movie? The question needs to be answered: Why would your MC want to go home? <br /><br />Dorothy's question seems to never be answered, unless there is a part when she verbalizes it to Toto, the lion, or tin man. Why does she want to leave Oz? <br /><br />You bring up some good questions, Murph. MC motivation is key, otherwise the story falls flat and the wheels stop turning. <br /><br />And... you don't suck, I've read so.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05514067724256745623noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7004461851315310562.post-81537102280993707632010-02-22T18:10:44.516-05:002010-02-22T18:10:44.516-05:00I think Toto and all dogs his size should go.
Als...I think Toto and all dogs his size should go.<br /><br />Also, Dorothy murdered the Wicked Witch of the West. It's true, Broadway told me so.<br /><br />Your story is intriguing, but you got me hung up with the "So why would she want to go home?" I'll be lurking to see what the smart people (Anita and Crew) say.Jonathon Arntsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17366218140886892757noreply@blogger.com