No, I'm not going to describe what was left in the toilet in my class bathroom this afternoon.
You're welcome.
I am going to share some examples of imagery my students came up with. Some context: I did a lesson on imagery today in which I defined it, read a book that contained a lot of it (This one), and then gave students some things to describe--Clouds, rain, snow. I got some good stuff, some cliche* stuff, and of course there was the clueless contingent. I'm sharing the good and the bad, but leaving out the cliche. You're not eight; you already know them.
The Good
The clouds looked like giant mashed potatoes.
The snow fell like baby powder.
The clouds looked like fluffy sour cream on a blue spoon.
I watched through the window as God melted icicles.
The snow was like a feather; you couldn't hear it at all.
The clouds were like little white boats in the ocean sky.
The snow was like whipped cream.
I looked out my window as a drizzle comes down, tiny water balloons crashing and breaking apart.
The rain fell like little liquid raisins.
The clouds were like fat blobs of cream cheese spread on a bagel. (Editor's note: Yum.)
The Clueless
I love how the clouds move.
I hate snow because it storms and that's why I don't like rain. (Editor's note: Swear to god that's what it says.)
I like snow. (Same kid.)
Rain makes rainbows.
Snow can get things wet.
Rain everywhere when it rains.
I love when it snows because we have snow days (me too!)
Snow is like hail, but softer.
And the Never Gonna Be a Poet Award goes to...
Snow is a weather. It is a weather in the winter because there is snowflakes. Snow is cold. Snow is dangerous because you might slip on the ice and fall on the ice.
*If you'd like a lesson in futility (and humility) try teaching third graders what cliches are. It is, by definition, almost impossible. Nothing is overused to them--they're eight! You wouldn't believe how many kids think "He ran faster than a deer" is the height of originality.
5 comments:
Did you teach this right before lunch?--because these guys seem hungry.
You're lucky you don't have my third grader. The clouds would be "shimmery like a Vulture Droid" (I'm not sure what a Vulture Droid is, but he assures me that it is on Star Wars The Clone Wars. He's currently battling to save the galaxy in the living room as I type this.)
Ha! Cream cheese is my best friend. Third graders are priceless.
Wow. Some of those good ones are ... really good. I write like the kid who's never gonna be a poet. I love that child. Please give him/her my regards.
What do you think of The Scorch Trials? I've been debating whether to buy it.
I've only read the first few pages so far.
Not bad!! I like the whipped cream snow and God melting icicles.
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